Monday 27 January 2020

Taqwa Ahmed English Article Revised

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Introverts in the world of extroverts
Taqwa Ahmed
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The world is full of different kinds of people with different nature, attitudes and personalities. Similarly “Introversion is a trait or tendency to avoid social interaction”. People who are introverts in their nature feel shy to confess their feelings and emotions with others. They preoccupied in their own thoughts and enjoy to spend their time alone.
Have you ever wondered why a person becomes introvert? The water will take the shape of the mold in which it is placed in, similarly, when the children is brought up in a society where talking in a high pitch or asking questions from elders is considered as insult then how can you expect that he or she will try to learn expressing his or her emotions in front of others?
Introverts suffer with invisibility. If we take an example of any school, the school Teacher pay attention to those students who are more active and have loud voice. So the shy one get unnoticed and tends to not to give answers in the next class. The extroverts take away all the limelight while the introverts stay in the shadow.
The society value a person who is outgoing, frank, bold and confident. Inshort everyone prefer to be an extrovert. The upbringing of the child, the role of the environment plays a major part in the development of human behavior. Sometimes the incidents and the situations make a change in your personality. You are not borned as an introvert, but the Society Made you! We must pay attention to those who are shy to come forward and encourage them to talk.
We live in a society where talking less is considered as rude. I have always heard that you must be talkative and confident to face the world and to become everyone’s favorite. But what if you don’t like to mingle with people? I like to give time to myself to enjoy my own company. But unfortunately, this society prefer social butterflies and introverts often face tough time to maintain their relationships with extrovert friends and later they got dumped by their buddies because they don’t want to go parties and public places. Their isolation leads to depression and anxiety.
Being an introvert I feel anxious sometimes when things get awkward in parties or when I’m with my relatives. Pakistan is a country where family relations and friends are valued. So your presence is mandatory in functions and events specially family weddings, you can’t skip them. Imagine what the wedding is like for an introvert person! Everybody drag you on stage and insist you to dance and click pictures. And your parents play crucial role to keep you in limelight so you can get better proposals. Parents are always anxious for their introvert child. They face many challenges and are concerned about why their children is being so shy? Why doesn’t he/she participate? Why doesn’t he/she enjoys social gathering? Parents must try to understand the psyche of their each children. If your children is not dominating the conversation as your other children that doesn’t mean that he’s not dump. “There’s zero correlation between the best talker and having the best ideas”. Said Susan Caine.
There are many living examples in our society who are introverts and they are successful in their respective fields. They don’t consider their trait of Introversion as their weakness.
The co-founder of Microsoft, and the world’s richest man Bil Gates is an example. He says: “ I think introverts can do quite well”, “If you’re clever you can learn to get the benefits of being an introvert”.

Susan Caine in her book “Quiet; the power of introverts” Wrtites: “You don’t need to be loud to have great ideas”.

Mark Zuckerberg, the founder of Facebook who has connected the world through his social app is an introvert himself.
You’ll be astonished to know that many celebrities who have fan following in millions are actually introverts.
The childhood crush of every children Emma Watson, Harry Potter’s star admitted that she’s an introvert and she feels nervous at the parties.  Reported by: Daily Mirror.
It’s a positive thing to be an introvert, you can be a creative thinker, good listener, and a brilliant observant.
Smile, breathe, remember you are safe and loved even out of your comfort zone.

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Introversion
Taqwa Ahmed
27-Jan-2020
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The world is full of different kinds of people with different nature, attitudes and personalities. Similarly “Introversion is a trait or tendency to avoid social interaction”. People who are introverts in their nature feel shy to confess their feelings and emotions with others. They preoccupied in their own thoughts and enjoy to spend their time alone.

Have you ever wondered why a person becomes introvert? The water will take the shape of the mold in which it is placed in, similarly, when the children is brought up in a society where talking in a high pitch or asking questions from elders is considered as insult then how can you expect that he or she will try to learn expressing his or her emotions in front of others?
Introverts suffer with invisibility. If we take an example of any school, the school Teacher pay attention to those students who are more active and have loud voice. So the shy one get unnoticed and tends to not to give answers in the next class. The extroverts take away all the limelight while the introverts stay in the shadow.
The society value a person who is outgoing, frank, bold and confident. Inshort everyone prefer to be an extrovert. The upbringing of the child, the role of the environment plays a major part in the development of human behavior. Sometimes the incidents and the situations make a change in your personality. You are not borned as an introvert, but the Society Made you! We must pay attention to those who are shy to come forward and encourage them to talk.
We live in a society where talking less is considered as rude. I have always heard that you must be talkative and confident to face the world and to become everyone’s favorite. But what if you don’t like to mingle with people? I like to give time to myself to enjoy my own company.
There are many living examples in our society who are introverts and they are successful in their respective fields. They don’t consider their trait of Introversion as their weakness.
The co-founder of Microsoft, and the world’s richest man Bil Gates is an example. He says: “ I think introverts can do quite well”, “If you’re clever you can learn to get the benefits of being an introvert”.

Susan Caine in her book “Quiet; the power of introverts” Wrtites: “You don’t need to be loud to have great ideas”.

Mark Zuckerberg, the founder of Facebook who has connected the world through his social app is an introvert himself.
You’ll be astonished to know that many celebrities who have fan following in millions are actually introverts.
The childhood crush of every children Emma Watson, Harry Potter's star admitted that she’s an introvert and she feels nervous at the parties.  Reported by: Daily Mirror.
It’s a positive thing to be an introvert, you can be a creative thinker, good listener, and a brilliant observant.
Smile, breathe, remember you are safe and loved even out of your comfort zone.


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